Stevo Posted January 25, 2006 Report Share Posted January 25, 2006 In english class we're starting a unit on persuasive writing. For my topic, i picked park passes. (trying to convince people they should be put into action). Only problem is- my teacher doesn't think it's strong enough of an argument and that i can't find statistics anywhere . She did say, however, that i can write my paper on it if i give her the three main supporting details on it by tomorrow. I can think of a bunch, but some of them aren't that strong. If anyone has any ideas, post them. Help me prove my teacher wrong Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Sno Mountain Skier Posted January 25, 2006 Report Share Posted January 25, 2006 Safety is a huge one. For the person using the feature, and the person who is f*cking up. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Stevo Posted January 25, 2006 Author Report Share Posted January 25, 2006 (edited) Check Edited January 25, 2006 by stevo Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Papasteeze Posted January 25, 2006 Report Share Posted January 25, 2006 Please define "the three main supporting details" What does she mean? 3 reasons on why there should be park passes? If that is the case. then 1. Safety - Education of the sport 2. To provide for a positive experience - The return ticket 3. To help better promote a growing sport - Park passes are a new idea. That is acutally a great question. Name 3 reasons why there should be park passes? To keep noobs outa the park is not one of them Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
pyro_boarder Posted January 25, 2006 Report Share Posted January 25, 2006 What are some of you ideas so we have some thing to work with? For statictics, try to e-mail Mt. Creek or another ski area that implements them and ask. If they are willing to help they could probaly give you a lot of info seince they are owned by a big corperation. Saftey Is definitaly the biggest concern. Are you looking for three different arguments, or could you do three reasons that park passes improve the saftey of the guests using the terrain parks and therefore should be implemented? Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
skidude Posted January 25, 2006 Report Share Posted January 25, 2006 A possitive experiance for people who are allowed in Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Stevo Posted January 25, 2006 Author Report Share Posted January 25, 2006 (edited) What are some of you ideas so we have some thing to work with? For statictics, try to e-mail Mt. Creek or another ski area that implements them and ask. If they are willing to help they could probaly give you a lot of info seince they are owned by a big corperation. Saftey Is definitaly the biggest concern. Are you looking for three different arguments, or could you do three reasons that park passes improve the saftey of the guests using the terrain parks and therefore should be implemented? I didn't think of that, i'll email mt. creek. I'm looking for 3 main arguments. 3 main ideas-make a paragraph for each to convince the reader that park passes should be used. 1.Safety 2.Better terrain conditions (will tie into safety) 3.Rental equipment damage (Rental rockers gouging their boards) 4.Less probability of lawsuits against mt. 5.Less injuries 6.More money for mt. (assuming they cost money) I need more to pick from. EDIT: Does anyone know the contact email address for MC. Their site is super slow- practically not working. Maybe it's just me? Edited January 25, 2006 by stevo Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
skifreak Posted January 26, 2006 Report Share Posted January 26, 2006 Like almost everybody else said, safety. Even though I only venture into the Park when Jeff goes through it, I can't stand seeing idiots in there snowplowing through causing a hazzard and just ruining the features. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
pyro_boarder Posted January 26, 2006 Report Share Posted January 26, 2006 Mt Creek has a form to fill out to send them e-mail. http://www.mountaincreek.com/contactus/index.htm Out of what you have so far, Safety and Less liability are very good points. Some other things to consider would probably be: Guest Experience (someone already mentioned) Allow for more progression ( probably already mentioned ) Encourage people to learn in a safer enviroment before moving to bigger stuff Control excessive crowds ( maybe tied into Safety ) Keep the features in better shape. I'll try to think of some more. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
toast21602 Posted January 26, 2006 Report Share Posted January 26, 2006 go with what papasteeze said, that would give you the strongest argument. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Gurp Posted January 26, 2006 Report Share Posted January 26, 2006 the other day at boulder there was a little kid sitting at the end of the 40ft rail and i didnt see him. There a 6 ft gap to it so i had to have speed to grind it. I 270ed off the rail and landed switch and just as i came out switch i missed hitting the kid by INCHES. Park passes would prevent alot of stuff like that from happening. If that give u any ideas. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Shadows Posted January 26, 2006 Report Share Posted January 26, 2006 the other day at boulder there was a little kid sitting at the end of the 40ft rail and i didnt see him. There a 6 ft gap to it so i had to have speed to grind it. I 270ed off the rail and landed switch and just as i came out switch i missed hitting the kid by INCHES. Park passes would prevent alot of stuff like that from happening. If that give u any ideas. doesn boulder have its own lift for the rail park? i know it services like two trails, you can go left or right. so why dont they just let the lifty tell people which way to go if they dont belong in the park Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Gurp Posted January 26, 2006 Report Share Posted January 26, 2006 that would be a good idea. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Stevo Posted January 26, 2006 Author Report Share Posted January 26, 2006 Okay, thanks a lot for your help. Here's my list of ideas: Park passes should be put into effect because: 1. They promote the growing sport. (not my best reason, sorry papa) 2. Terrain is preserved better,leaving a lasting impression on the visitors. 3. Liability Reasons 4. Less injuries (terrain park-related) 5. More money for mountain (Assuming that the mt. sells them) 6.Friendlier environment- No people yelling or fighting over stupid little things (<--New one) She didn't even know what a terrain park was, so she can't honestly see the viewpoints, without me pointing them out to her . I think i have a lot to work with-she's wrong. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Jar3d Posted January 26, 2006 Report Share Posted January 26, 2006 every park should have a park pass. but we all know its not that ez to get a park pass into action... when ur done with ur essay email a copy to every mountain in pa haha, see if u can actually persuade a mountain or 2 =) good luck my man Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Stevo Posted January 26, 2006 Author Report Share Posted January 26, 2006 every park should have a park pass. but we all know its not that ez to get a park pass into action... when ur done with ur essay email a copy to every mountain in pa haha, see if u can actually persuade a mountain or 2 =) good luck my man Haha, that will really make my teacher feel dumb, f the persuasive essay persuaded! Maybe i'll do this. Extra credit, here i come!! Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Stevo Posted January 26, 2006 Author Report Share Posted January 26, 2006 Well, it worked. Thanks everyone- teacher's letting me do my paper on it! Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Papasteeze Posted January 26, 2006 Report Share Posted January 26, 2006 Well, it worked. Thanks everyone- teacher's letting me do my paper on it! Cool!! Jar3d has a great idea!! Mail it to every mountain - post it on here so we can duplicate and send it. Hey, why not even post it on here so everyone can help edit it into being the most persuasive piece possible. I mean come on.. think how persuasive it would be if a ton of people helped write it? Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Stevo Posted January 26, 2006 Author Report Share Posted January 26, 2006 Cool!! Jar3d has a great idea!! Mail it to every mountain - post it on here so we can duplicate and send it. Hey, why not even post it on here so everyone can help edit it into being the most persuasive piece possible. I mean come on.. think how persuasive it would be if a ton of people helped write it? will do Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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